"An everyday man gets thrown into the world of twilight thousands of years before the start of the plot. With immortality and incredible abilities. How will this man's presence change the outcome of the original story?" [ this is a slow-burn fanfiction; the MC is just trying to experience life and enjoy it, not to take over the world and rule from the shadows.] I do not own twilight or the characters of the twilight world, all that belongs to me are my own characters.
Your story is good but needs something intriguing, Jaden's encounter with Miss. Thomson was already good, you need something else to hold the reader by their throat, world-building surrounding Jaden is top-notch more than 5 stars... Your story was already very good, I just give an idea...