anakin and padme erotic fanfic

It's good so far. But couldn't you have just written all the gifts the MC got from the ROB in one chapter? Btw who is gonna be part of the mc's harem? I hope Padme is one. I know she is supposed to be Anakin's wife in the future and I like Anakin he's one of my favourite characters in star wars. But Padme's ending kinda sucked. Dying at the hands of Anakin so yeah please add her to the harem!?!?

I really like where this is going, I know this is going to sound really insane but I imagine Atriox ntr Anakin with Padme, I don't know why I thought that

Will there be a Mortal Kombat: Obito Uchiha vs Darth Vader? I wonder how Vader and Obito will react to this fight and Luke with Naruto (after all, they literally have a similar history, and Obito is literally the Darth Vader of Naruto's world, and Madara is like Palpatine (he literally used Force lightning against Naruto and Sasuke after the battle with Guy). How will Anakin and Padme react to all this, what will their reaction be when it is mentioned that Luke kissed Leia (you can even mention that this was a reference to the myth of Oedipus (the guy who married his mother, although it could be mentioned (as some kind of fanon or something like that) that Luke was supposed to kiss Padme (well, Lucas could have done this, since Luke repeats the Monomyth about the hero with 1000 faces).And so your fanfic is one of the best in this genre of reactions.

Amazing story using the legends/canon. A fanfic for every Star Wars fan who actually wanted things to be different and not have the “Too much SAND” guy be with our beautiful padme

This is just overall a good idea with terrible execution i can understand some of the decisions but other just fall flat. One of the main issues i take from this is the seemingly the mc proclivity to change everything he is on a dime he went from smart kid doing well on a test and flirting with padme to suddenly making dna targeting superweapons because he decided he wanted to end all war. Then he suddenly gets told by padme she is in love with him then abandons all plans and ideas on a whim this is just a bad combo of trying to be compelling romance but fails terribly, I can understand making qui gon put anakin in the pod race anyway because jedi can be asses about the force and panaka not wanting to use untested tech but where was the sense in just hiding there marriage in politics anakin hid his because he was a jedi the mc has no such issue I think you should take some time to learn pacing character development and interaction and story structure about how one decision can affect other thing also just use a mad scientist system the whole rick son plot just fell flat.