canaan story

Finally! This is the kind of story I've been looking for! A strong female lead that isn't a typical Villainess, or reborn as a Villainess, or some love romance between multiple guys/people-type story. It really pissed me off that I couldn't find anything similar in compared to Revy(Black Lagoon) & Canaan(Canaan anime series). Then, I could barely find any strong female lead stories online, which upsetted me greatly, cos let's be honest, we're a bit tired of 'a guy gets isekai'd' or 'betrayed' type-story. Or at least I am cos there's like a thousand of them. All I can say is, Author san has me hooked. I cant wait to read more.

The author of this story is new to writing. I can only deduce that he is also very very young. The grammar in this story, lack of punctuation, walls of text and chaotic writing is worse than the majority of authors who get their fic dropped due to the terrible formatting and grammar they used. Which is why I drop it as well. The story simply isn't legible with the complete lack of formatting, grammar and paragraphs. I unfortunately cannot accurately rate the quality of the story because I simply could not read it due to how it was written... To the author... I encourage you to keep on writing but do so to work on these issues. Writing out your stories is a great way to practice your writing skills but you do need to do your best to format your text as you write it. Each sentence should end with a symbol. Question marks for questions, exclamation marks for yelling, points... For breaks and a single point to end a sentence. Don't group more than three sentences in a single paragraph. If you do, your text is not legible to people with dyslexia. Don't shorten your words to slang like sum for something. Very few people outside the sphere of influence that you are in will make such a connection. Storytelling / Writing is an international. It pans across generations. As such it pays to put the effort into making it legible for all. I'm a millennial, your probably one of the next gen kids judging by how you use your words: work this and your story will be lit. Sincerely, Canaan

Let me preface this by saying that I absolutely a d o r e your setting. Theology and biblical history are some of my favourite things to read about (cough cough His Dark Materials) and your synopsis alone just hits all the right spots. It is a pretty niche topic, though. You've done it proud. I won't pretend that I'm an expert on matters like this - I mainly dabble in other pantheons and ancient civilisations, so I'm out of my depth when it comes to Canaan (Levant?). That being said, I'll treat the setting without its biblical connotations and pretend everything is fully original unless stated otherwise. The first chapter gives me major Hunger Games vibes for some reason. When Lev talks about receiving a Blessing so his family can get the money they need, it's like how the kids in District 12 had to sign up for tesserae to get more food. of course, it's different in that these kids aren't being forced to go into an arena and butcher each other, but I just wanted to bring that up. Tangents aside, I love the dialogue. It's normally my go-to indicator when I judge what makes a story good and what doesn't - in my opinion, dialogue fleshes out characters in a natural way. Provided, of course, that said dialogue is natural in and of itself. There are times when it comes off as a tad expository, but in the end, it all flows very well and it feels like actual people are speaking. Especially the 'oy vey' at the end of chapter 2 - y'know, it just clicks. Even the steam vehicles. All in all, the exposition is handled very well. I'm not that bothered by the massive walls of text, honestly. It could do with some better paragraphing, but the explanations of the world around them do the job quite well. I would've preferred it if it was dialogue-ified, but I can't have everything. Amazing read, adding it to my library. great job, 10/10 would totes recommend except for stability of updates, but that'll probably change sometime in the near future.

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