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Storu about a time traveling dog who goes sgainidt all odds to save his madter and dedtroy the world as venrgence for eveything that ha shappened. after yrars of training to becomr yhr brry best he succesds and becomes the great onr but not eitjout gailing to save his best friend from the ebil gunther lord who esnts to kill them all

Took time to finish it (The free chapters at least) but here I am. Overall y our writing style is good, but sometimes there are some issues I dislike, the one being when you forgot the name of Marcellus' father (I don't blame you, I too forgot his name!) and put a place holder there... but it will be fixed soon so it will no longer be an issue. The story's pace is a little too slow for my tastes but is enjoyable all the same. This ties in with another thing I noticed, while the background making is good, it becomes just a little confusing when it ties in with political things, character development, and the introduction of new characters like the twins that attacked Gunther in the festival. About the characters, I find Yuè underwhelming when it comes to most things, he is too passive and honestly, weak-spirited for my tastes. It is not an issue most of the time because there are MCs that go from weak to strong in a rather smooth and natural manner, but I don't get this feeling from Yuè, in my opinion, his lack of drive and rather passiveness are problematic. His motivation can be boiled down to "Help Marcellus, be with Gunther and Emery", he feels less of a character and more of a drama plot object. Explaining it better: His sole existence feels like he is standing there to cause drama and work out the romance. I know, it is a romance story but it feels a little rushed the romance, I'm a slow-burn appreciator, so his interactions with Gunther feel... rather forced. Gunther didn't know virginity and whatnot a few chapters ago, and yet he and Yuè were together just a few chapters afterward, and dirty talking too. It feels a little rushed in my opinion. The thing with Edgar too but it doesn't concern the majority of the story right now so it doesn't matter in the slightest. I can't help but feel like Yuè has some kind of Stockholm syndrome because those guys, in practice, are just a little better than Edgar and he is put in danger all the same, I dare to say even more. And except for Gunther who is a little forceful, and Emery who is reasonable, I say that there are few reasons for Yuè, realistically, to stay with the family, but this is a me thing. There wouldn't be a story if Yuè went away, so the validity of this nitpicking is questionable at best, and irrelevant at worst. I'm not a fan of the character design but you went to some lengths to get images for them, so it is a good point on its own when I take into account the practical side, and a map made in such detail is a rare thing too, adding more depth and weight to the World Background and building. I say this story has potential, although it is more drama and character-driven than plot and world-driven story. Side stories focusing on the wider world and culture will be interesting, to say the least. I finish my review here, goodbye and Godspeed on your writing and endeavors. As an additional note, you were posting every day until six days before I posted this review, I think it is just a slower week or something like that for you, thus far the update rate is very good.

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