"An everyday man gets thrown into the world of twilight thousands of years before the start of the plot. With immortality and incredible abilities. How will this man's presence change the outcome of the original story?" [ this is a slow-burn fanfiction; the MC is just trying to experience life and enjoy it, not to take over the world and rule from the shadows.] I do not own twilight or the characters of the twilight world, all that belongs to me are my own characters.
So far, the story is very intriguing. The author did a good job of portraying Leo's emotions and especially his anxiety in public. When I read his thoughts and how uncomfortable he is, somehow my heart also hurt for him. I don't know if the story will develop with more complexity, but the idea of Leo's anxiety and fear caused by the public reacted that badly only because his blood was of different color hit me in a different way than if Leo was some type of a supernatural being. Keep up the good work!