obito kidnaps kakashi fanfiction

Currently at chapter 213, the story is very good, but there's a major inconsistency around chapters 160-190 concerning the ages of Kakashi, Obito, and the protagonist. When Kakashi first appeared, he was 10 years old, and Kakashi and Obito were the same age. Kakashi is 3 years younger than Renjiro, the protagonist's teammate. Then, suddenly, we see Obito as 13-14 years old, but the main character is only 6-9 months old. This error needs to be corrected, or it should be clarified whether the age difference between Kakashi and Obito is canon within this fanfiction. Thank you.

it's good but i wonder who will obito get with just think about it obito with a lot of wife's and kakashi and rid is good to ok il come back when there is more bye.

good story idea but badly executed The story idea are 9/10 for me,but the conversation are messing around with my brain sometimes.. Like,bro..if you want the conversation between character easier to understand,you need to put some space in between..you make it hard to read by putting each conversation on the same paragraph with only (" ") as a divider of each conversation. There's one scene that Obito call kakashi and kakashi call mc's name,but i read it twice to understand.. (Obito"kakashi" kakashi"kenji...")(Something like that..i forgot which chapter was it) If you decide to make it like continuous conversation in one paragraph you need to put more than name in between but if you put it like this Obito : kakashi Kakashi : kenji... It probably way easier to understand.. And there's some typo in there..you type "Drogan" instead of dragon..i don't know if Drogan was the name of the dragon or something but it feel like it's not..but that's still OK for me

This translation was alright, but man, why do you have to keep repeating the full name of someone that is already introduced once? Rin Nohara this, Rin Nohara that. Just call her Rin. I thought you already 'fixed' a lot of things, but in reality, not really. It's so jarring to read and have Rin's full name in almost every paragraph. You call Obito, Obito. Kakashi, Kakashi. But Rin has to be Rin Nohara consistently?

The translation is kinda ass ike everyone has hyuga eyes like damn when did kakashi become a hyuga and how is kushina still a child with kakshi and obito around and where the hell is minato