hermione bonds with fleur and harry fanfiction

Harem: Harry Potter = Hermione, Fleur and Luna Marvel = Jean, Natasha and Wanda Could add more to the harem like three more to Harry Potter and marvel making it twelve overall.

One of the best Harry Potter fanfiction out there. Love every part of the story. It's fascinating how you put every pieces and build this wonderful novel. Love Fleur by the way.

comment on ch 15, but figured I might as well copy it into a review.--It's your story, so do what you feel comfortable with writing in regards to the pairing mate. Imo though, Hermione to me always seemed a better fit as a sister figure, even if I do like the way you're portraying her. Still, she's rather dependent on Harry and I can't see them in a truly equal relationship atm. Fleur or in a few years even Tonks would fit better I think. Fleur could be the passion to his logic, and Tonks pushing him into properly enjoying life with her goofiness/impulsiveness(tempered by auror training), whereas Hermione is perhaps too much like him as things stand now. Harry and Hermione dating for a few months to a school year could see them figuring out that they're much too alike, with Hermione honestly having little to over Harry doesn't already bring to the table himself. With Fleur going to work for Gringotts as a warder or curse breaker(not sure which it canonically is tbh), she could be a liaison to the Goblins as well if he wants to rent out grants to them to help with vault security and such? Honestly Fleur's Veela nature is also something you can really play with, especially with a System like Harry's. Giving himself Creature abilities perhaps, upgrading Fleur's heritage with some Phoenix genes for further control of her allure and regeneration maybe? Honestly you're a creative writer and despite it's flaws and rather shallow harem romance I really did like Origin(and the one before) so I'm sure wherever you choose to go with this fic it'll at least be fun to read.

Maybe it's just me, but the author seems to really be trying to push a harry + hermione fanfiction. they're only 11, no need to rush bits like that in yet.

Story is fine for the but riddled with mistakes. Riddle teaching DADA 2 years earlier than canon, completely forgetting the Gy***lcon, one dimensinality (Fleur, Susan, Harry, Hermione), fight scenes are mediocre, and Dumbledore letting the mc shout expletives against him. Mc faces few challenges (Both internal and external), suffers mary sueness, and lastly roomance is nonexistent (Fleur being the main option but author barely going into their relationship). All in all it was an okay read.