bucky and steve protect for tony fanfic

I liked the premise, the beginning, and parts of the story overall. The problem is that we have Maggie Stark as the protagonist, who has been shown to be someone who could be Tony Stark(her brother)‘s equal or near equal. THEN she also has the super soldier serumn like Steve or Bucky, with all the training HYDRA could provide, such as the Red Room like Natasha. Why is that bad? It isn’t. Until her presence in the MCU does basically nothing to change how the story goes. Major events stay basically the same, except some have an extra person in it- such as when going into the past to get the infinity stones, she joins Steve, stands there while he gets the scepter, rushes off to help with the cube, gets slapped by past-Hulk, rushes back to see Steve basically defeat past-Steve, knocks out past-Steve, and then has to go with Steve and Tony to the past. WHERE she follows Tony to get the cube, and nothing changes… except she’s in the scene. Her role in this story amounts to basic emotional support to the Avengers and Bucky. Of course that’s downplaying it a bit to make summarization easier, but still… she’s by no means fulfilling the role cut out for her. She doesn’t even do the snap instead of Tony, so all I can think of her being there is to give Bucky a happy ending, and help Pepper raise Morgan. Of course, a lot of that is just expectations vs reality. It’s just disappointing there. Overall a good novel though.

The writing needs more polishing. Learn to describe character or any background properly. The story basically changed Tony into a hick and everything else follows the movie. There are a lot of confusing sentences like " Steve read the book". Is it really Steve or is it Howard? Even when Tony is being confused with Steve. Reread every chapter that you write and ensure it's quality.

I read many fic with forced plot, and this fic is definitely one of them -Tony said Friday is monitoring Bucky 24/7, and yet the useless AI still lost sight of Bucky and don't know how it happen -Ross is aiming at Tony, and yet when the whole building is drugged, they left Tony alone instead of kidnapping him -An AI of Tony Stark, got put down by a Virus of all thing -And said AI missed any suspicious movement and got Tony shot, but also the explosion still happen -It's funny how Friday fail to notice an unknown radiowave right in the office of Tony Stark, the author make a reasoning of because it's already there before Tony put Friday in. That is not how it work, it doesn't matter when Tony put Friday in, but that thing should have noticed right away that there is an unknown radiowave transmitting signal somewhere especially when it was right near one of it's server

So he rusjed all the first few chaps and then decided tojust copy another novel off of here to set up his relationships with bucky and steve minus the actual good interesting and character building moments of the novel. Overall just lazy copying while adding his own twists in to make it his own character