hello neighbor x player fanfic

Dissapointed. Was hoping for a proper conversation with the main trio but author largely skips it. Not even an introduction to say hello neighbor or hello fello muggleborn to hermione.

LIKE A GOOD NEIGHBOR STATE FARM IS HERE LIKE A GOOD NEIGHBOR STATE FARM IS HERE LIKE A GOOD NEIGHBOR STATE FARM IS HERE LIKE A GOOD NEIGHBOR STATE FARM IS HERE LIKE A GOOD NEIGHBOR STATE FARM IS HERE LIKE A GOOD NEIGHBOR STATE FARM IS HERE

hello author, are you still continuing this fanfic? hello author, are you still continuing this fanfic? hello author, are you still continuing this fanfic? hello author, are you still continuing this fanfic?

Hello, the story is good but there is a lot of mistakes at writing. First the quality of the whole story would be better with punctuation. For example : Shuri hello all is good and you By Shuri : Hello all is good and you ? Or "Hello all is good and you ?" (Shuri) If you put a few symbol like " x " /' x ' /[ x ] for dialog / though / system that would make the story more interesting to read. Right now it is not unreadable but difficult. That makes me want to skip a few passage. In a whole its good. But long text without a point symbol and Uppercase put a lot of trouble. At least there is return to the line and blank lines between two phrase. So it is not a lost case. Well good luck to you author, I wish you take a look to those few hints :) I will continue the reading of that fanfic don't give up.

Plz make Red x asuna Kirito x suguha Chris x the ggo player/liz(blacksmith) Hmm maybe give a special ability to red like kirito's duel wielding That's all for now And lol 1 ****era If u don't know how to appreciate a good novel go suck your milk