hurt deeks fanfiction

Okay, the idea behind this is amazing. But you shouldn't just correct the translation, you should also rewrite some things. Especially the connections to God Valley, because they really hurt the fanfiction in general.

you have some potential. but you need to read more you make rookie mistakes and commit so many clichés it physically hurt to read your work. read 100 of the top harry potter fanfiction. plus the books again the attempt this again

I gotta say I was disappointed. Going into this I was hoping for a character who was like Toriko, I didn’t really care that the mc was majorly nerfed, or that he was the younger brother of Kurenai, but the way the character was done just wasn’t to my taste. I think the novel is definitely a good novel and deserves 3.5/5 stars. I think what hurt you was world building, specifically that this is a fanfiction so I never give full points for that to fanfiction, and the other place you got hurt in my opinion was character design which I just didn’t really like. Good luck with your work I hope you stick with it and keep your bigger fans happy.

Just hurt my head to read. Just hurt my head to read Just hurt my head to read Just hurt my head to read Just hurt my head to read Just hurt my head to read Sorry.

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