i sat me down to write a simple story

This story is such a eye catcher I was caught on it on the first chapter the writer always leaves u on a cliffhanger and I personally love it it makes me think about what I read all day such beautiful writing skills amazes me to think that someone sat down and could write such a thrilling and exciting story THANK U

he she, author joins the story, instead of MC sat down (it is "I sat down") grammar is so bad that i skip most of the nonsense MC arrives in a world of miniature humans to become their god

The two of them walked out of the office and sat down on the edge of the flower bed. The two of them walked out of the office and sat down on the edge of the flower bed.

its a good concept however the grammar is very lacking so I recommend using somthing like grammarly, also the way you narrate is kind of weird. You use first person (mc point of view) and third person (narrators point of view). I recommend you use more first person than third because that makes the reader feel more involved with the story. And when you write in third person dont write like you are the one who is speaking but a narrator who is in the universe and does not know about the fourth wall. For example dont say "the mc sat down" say "Lucas sat down"

Author here, this is my first time ever writing a fanfic, so please let me know what I can do to improve in the future! I couldn't find a JJK fanfic that had whitebeards powers so I sat down and started to write my own. I hope you enjoy!