tony and pepper first kiss fanfiction

so far the plot itself is great and even passes great. Tony characters matching the whole come from the future or parallel universe. But it pepper's harem not tony. Plus there is no romance just pure sex, no dates, no flirting. And we don't see tony interact with his children.

the story is quite lacking, most of the plot is too forced like when his mother died and suddenly the ancient one is visiting so he can train his ability, the timeskip also didnt help as it feels reading a summary rather than a story then you suddenly add tony stark out of the blue, and just like with other conversations they speak like robot or badly written script from a 3rd rate author, pepper alrrady demanded that he speak with tony immediately, she should first ask if he's already fine first or if he needs any thing, your mc is a robot and everyone else is a robot

first of all no offense the story is good but i find somethings not very up to standard, 1st for someone who is aimed at ultimate ironman he spent like what 10-15 chapters for just natasha plot and redroom even if there was that manipulative stance but still too much time wasted or rather chapters wasted over 1 woman's plot. second his talks about change world blah blah he spent ch to built a base, no company no product aimed at civilian. you do understand that tony and pepper are set even if u are including various other elements no mention of pepper makes story a bit empty. No update regarding assassin for howard like wht happened n all

I mean I really enjoyed reading it as it was genuinely written well, BUT. First was Iron Man and the Hulk. You'd think the MC would be able to stop the villains. And he does. But in both instances something happened so that the villains exist anyways. Ironmonger coincidentally finds the Mini-Arcreactor kept by tony instead of taking Tony's who then uses the one kept by Pepper. Abomination still comes into being despite Bruce being taken away earlier because that Mr. Blue guy suddenly decides that Bruce has no more value instantly and runs off to that General hunting him. I must repeat that interpersonal relationships and organization of the story are immaculate. But it's just forcing the original story to stay as it is regardless of the MCs interference.

if anyone is reading. here is a warning. author is obsessed with tony. tony can see mc dungeon and lvls and all the crazy shit. first day in the world and he already meets tony by crazy unlikely coincidence