can you use passive verbs in short stories

Thank you for Waiting, Mister Tang!

Forced out by her step-mother, she was driven to desperation and had no way of surviving other than to sign herself away and marry herself into a rich and influential family. Three years into the marriage, her wealthy husband had spoiled her to heavens. The only problem was that they had no inheritors in their family. Inside the luxurious mansion, Pei Qiqi angrily threw a stack of newspaper onto the man, “The article is claiming that I am a hen who cannot lay eggs! But Tang Yu, it’s you who has issues!” The man put down the newspaper and agreed to what his young wife was saying, “Why would they write false information? Your zodiac is the pig!” “Tang! Yu!” She stomped her feet out of anger. The man grinned, “So what we have no kids? You are my little baby.” Pei Qiqi thought, how did this scene change so fast!

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Endless Pampering Only For You

As childhood sweethearts, they were made to engage under the manipulations of their families. It involved having to to live in the same room and sleep together. One night, she is accidentally made drunk, and in his delirium, he kisses her only to realize he enjoys it. From time to time, he would sneak a kiss on her, but his “crime” is eventually discovered in an accident. After being accused by her, he says with a smile, “You are my wife, why can’t I kiss you?” The two people’s daily routine is full of bickering and mutual discrediting of each other. Although he claims to disparage, he actually cares intensely about her. He feels crazily jealous when she is close to other men, to the point of tying her to his side, so that she becomes exclusively his. Tags: Campus Love, Childhood Sweethearts, Pampering Romance

Mo Xiaoshui · Teen

I Only Love You In The Whole Wide World

Four years. That’s how long he took to transform from being a penniless young man to becoming the heir of a mysterious conglomerate. His return was a glorious event! Four years. That was the time she took to fall from being a rich heiress to an insignificant script writer in the entertainment industry. And she could even end up in jail! “Evelyn Sherman, if only you had loved me a little more than money then, you wouldn’t have to beg me now.” The man jeers coldly. Evelyn Sherman smiles cunningly. She pushes a little bun into his arms. The little bun hugs him and even gives him a big kiss, “President, do you want to buy my mommy? She can pretend to be a teenager or act like a queen. She can do both young, refreshing roles and the hard core stuff equally well. She’s a professional genius at giving birth. You can bring her home for US$10 million!” Chester Yale stares at the little face that looks exactly like his in a shock. He clenches his teeth and said, “Deal! I will add on another $10 million to buy you too!” In the next second, a little princess pokes her head out from behind the door, “Daddy, you’ll need another $10 million for me.”

Stupa Demon · General

Amongst the Stars, Out in the Ocean, There's You

The only condition he asked of her before marriage was for her to be “good’. After marriage, she truly was well-behaved. She sees his gifts but does not react, she knows about his promiscuous relationships but does not ask. She holds no hope of garnering his love and affection, and never once, did she forget to take her Plan B pills. She even complied and signed the divorce papers! With a grim look on his face, he stopped the woman who was about to escape. She grinned sweetly, “Young master Sulliven, don’t forget, we have gotten a divorce, we are completely uninvolved now!” The man shredded the divorce papers and smiled with his teeth clenched, “Ask the bun in your stomach whether or not we are still involved!”

Zhao Xibao · General

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Proteety_Promi

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This story has potential. But there are some grammatical errors that need to be proofread. Especially, I noticed you write present tense after 'was' in the passive voice, while it's supposed to be past perfect tense. And also you need to be extra careful about the usage of verbs. Overall, it's a good novel. Keep working on it!

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i think you should use grammarly to check your error also I think if you use skill like meditation and Mana manipulation it should Max out or you got into another skill with that evolve from of that skill. btw sword and martial mastery it's a passive skill. also meditation can be passive and active skill. overall the novel is good and entertaining. I hope you continue the work.

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