shuri hurt fanfiction

In this last chapter Akeno and shuri are reunited and by the looks of it their personality is a a copy of each other just akeno having a M side and shuri pure S.

Hello, the story is good but there is a lot of mistakes at writing. First the quality of the whole story would be better with punctuation. For example : Shuri hello all is good and you By Shuri : Hello all is good and you ? Or "Hello all is good and you ?" (Shuri) If you put a few symbol like " x " /' x ' /[ x ] for dialog / though / system that would make the story more interesting to read. Right now it is not unreadable but difficult. That makes me want to skip a few passage. In a whole its good. But long text without a point symbol and Uppercase put a lot of trouble. At least there is return to the line and blank lines between two phrase. So it is not a lost case. Well good luck to you author, I wish you take a look to those few hints :) I will continue the reading of that fanfic don't give up.

22 review Neo meet shouko nishyama from koi no katachi and medaka from medaka box and nura rikuo showing how diverse is his reality and at the end meet Akeno and shuri

HAREM list conformed by author on wattpad: Tsunade Shuri Yasaka RIAS (maybe) Akeno (maybe ) Grayfia Gabriel Sona Rossweise Rest author have to decide who will join, there can be more

Okay, the idea behind this is amazing. But you shouldn't just correct the translation, you should also rewrite some things. Especially the connections to God Valley, because they really hurt the fanfiction in general.