After a long time had a story to read with some realistic action like thinking about the SHIELD AND HYDRA thing and going slow and story does not seem to run fast to not catch . Love the work man , keep the update on rollllll[img=recommend]

giving my self a 5 star it's my first novel Fanfic so new to these plz comment always in each chapter for me to know how my work is and if guys have any ideas i took these genra because there really aren't that many Fanfic on Omnitrix don't know why though support and comment

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AI slop... After you realize that this is just an AI novel with GPT writing the dialogue it just become unreadable. Is just a bunch of unrealistic scenarios with unrealistic reaction to fill the word count 🤷🏻‍♂️

Could have been great. It's concept is okay but lacks any commons sense, mc casually says that he created an A.I and there is no response from parents, goes cliche entertainment industry route, and do not use Omnitrix efficiently.

Great Story idea, the development direction is good but the execution was poor, you are trying to rush things way too fast, the time it would take for an app to become popular, is generally much longer than three days without constant advertising, it would probably take a year or two. That time could be then dedicated towards other things like character development, or maybe his struggles before he got money, how, and what he is learning, perhaps everyday life, also I feel like reports wouldn’t just show up a some kids door without a good reason. 1 they know nothing about him, 2 even if they did know everything about him, they would need to apply to thier company for them to do interviews. Now on to the good stuff: the protagonist, although he doesn’t feel quite human, he has a more standard human morality (don’t you guys go bullshitting in the comments oh I wouldn’t steal, trust me most people if they had those powers would use them to benefit themselves, although they wouldn’t outright start doing whatever they would want, they would at least start with some small but negligible crimes) as I was saying although the protagonist doesn’t quite feel human he has what I would consider a normal moral compass not some hero or villian complex, with a complete hard on for Tony Stark (a little Tony glazing but you know in most marvels stories it is impossible for authors not to glaze Tony, that is just how marvel in general is). So Overall Story is great idea, awful pacing, below average execution. 4/10

Ignoring the random ROB stuff (I hate that kind of plot with a passion) the story starts off strong and with great ideas. But the development of the story is just so insanely fast paced and the plot started to become nonsensical. Like one second the dude builds windows 11 futuristic form alongside baymax (his self created ai with emotions), the next second dude published comics like death note and naruto and was swarmed by reporters at his house only for him to throw his slipper at one and get harassed on the tv. It had good potential, bad execution.

it's only 5 chapters till this moment, and it's interesting. i like the concept of the omnitrix in the marvel universe and the writing quality is good

Grammar terrible at the beginning, in later chapters it’s used with ai and becomes decent, but still meh. Common sense has no meaning in the story. Character dialogues between each other are very basic and not good until the later chapters where ai is used. Author has no idea how to use 2 different ways of speaking and thinking, instead uses quotations for both. Character description is barely there, literal bare bones. Story has 0 character development for mcs family, they’re just there, not good. World background is meh, no descriptions for anything besides the fact it’s mcu world. This idea is cool but there’s a lot of things that just don’t make sense, it’s like a middle schooler is writing a cool instant power up/tech story for fun.

Fic's great Bro, not gonna lie. Sure it's still in its "calm before the storm" arc, so the happenings are understandably a little uneventful with not much alien action, but still, it was able to grab my interest. There were also some plot holes here and there and a few errors in grammars which are hardly noticeable, so you might want to focus on that. Overall, you've got somethin' big going on here man, so don't stop updating.