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chicken_bagelLv13mth
2024-12-31 15:06

I'm only making this review to say that the author is good at writing. Like, the way the sentences, structure and dialogues flow together is neat ngl. Maybe I'm half-surprised because recently I've been reading a lot of new novels and the writing isn't good since the authors are still rookies. I've only read 2 chapters, but the setting, goal and characters seem basic since it's been done before at least a hundred times. The only reason I feel compelled to continue is because of the clean writing. Keep going. I don't mind eating the same food again haha.

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Tuluz
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I rarely write reviews but this whole story was a massive disappointment. Going into this I thought it would be really good due to the amount of 5 star reviews and the concept of the novel however I was quickly disappointed. There a three main issues that I have with this novel 1. The author has a weird grasp of economics, the way the currency was setup up had problems from the beginning however these could be overlooked until the author decided to start adding USD conversion at which point everything went downhill. For perspective the author claims that maids in the MCs family get paid a relatively high wage of 1 gold a month. However the author later says that 1,000 gold = $10,000 (1 gold = $10) meaning that the maids make less than 1/560 of the average monthly salary in the US. This could maybe make sense if the MC was in a third world country where labor costs were low however the MC is the son of the richest family in the world and obviously does not live in a poor area. I got past this point however and kept reading, however shortly after when the MC introduces chess it is priced at 100 bronze per set which would be $0.001 per set. You can buy ramen in most gas stations for $1 meaning 1 ramen noodles container = 1,000 chess sets. Make it make sense. Again this would maybe be fine if the author didn’t bring up the amount the MC made in USD repeatedly. 2. The MC tries to implement modern social practices that do not make sense in a medieval setting onto this world (e.g. The MC tries to force all the house staff to work a maximum of 8 hours per day and no more, great thought except it makes no sense in a medieval society where work hours are determined by sunrise and sunset) 3. Cringe / Cliche. Everything seems to always work out perfectly for the MC with little to no effort, MC follows reincarnator 101 on steroid template to make money using modern ideas but has an AI that does all the work and creates perfect blueprints. What really irked me though was the MC just straight up giving away the soap recipe to other people because he didn’t want to hurt their business and wanted everyone to live peacefully and happily. Verdict: Had and has potential, author should rewrite what they have an try again. Would not recommend reading until the author makes some edits and fixes some of the biggest issues specifically the currency.

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