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A_Sleepless_dream
A_Sleepless_dreamLv1413d
2024-12-27 13:39

Only major great positive thing about this that makes this story standout is the MC is willingness to kill and slaughter which comes from his thirst for justice. Great concept the system is amazing but the system never shows up after the first few times… on chapter 38 rn… I’m sure it gets better if there’s more chapters in the future but right now there’s nothing…. there are a few plot holes in the beginning and it’s really annoying. Also mc reveals his identity almost right away to all corrupt cops and the people behind everything…. he doesn’t use his abilities when obviously there is a corrupt official in front of him. He doesn’t use his ability to uncover it right away, which is a major plot hole… the answers right in front of him, but he refuses to see it even when he does. He is still an idiot about how it plays out. I really question if he’s an actual detective or not. Any plot on him finding anything out or thinking for himself is now just bullshit to me. He uses his ability to uncover everything now which just further makes this more stupid. I’m guessing the author thought it would be a good plot idea for close to the end or something but it’s not like he’s going to do anything, even knowing if his bosses boss, the chief is corrupted or not. In fact, it’s pretty obvious that he is or one of the chief bosses is….. Writting quality is really good though yes it has some other elements in it but if you overlook it, it’s a solid work. Things get kind of slow once the second part when he moves to a new city comes in, but I’m sure they’ll pick back up again. Maybe the system will actually turn on. Or he’ll actually start making a real difference. I was hoping MC would kill about 100 to 1000 people once he entered the city. By the time he lives the city, I want 10,000 dead if not, I’m gonna say he was overhyped and stupid. Basically, he wasted the power he was given to this point. Not fully but like he could’ve done more and he makes it so big that he needs to spend every second striving for justice. All I see is him letting corrupt officials go until he is forced to kill them. Almost all of the answers he would’ve wanted could’ve been a tamed by shaking his Chiefs hand, which he refuses to do, even though he’s been in a few meetings with him many times as well as being sent to another department, which could’ve given him the opportunity to shaken his hand… in fact it’s pretty weird he didn’t because that’s how it normally works. When you leave a department you say thank you to your boss and say it was a pleasure working with you…. To me, this is a major pothole with the amount of times he’s met the chief….. Overall, this is a good story, decent plot and a cool MC… I apologize for how hard I am on this but I had high expectations. It is a good story, which I recommend people just don’t expect anything amazing right away or for a while as I expect things to be dragged out in the future. Right now, the pacing is pretty good and the storyline is good. 1-38 is solid.

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A_Sleepless_dream
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Another pothole is the fact he never tried shaking Leo’s hand or the last guy‘s hand when he was questioning him for a name. It’s a loophole he never thought of using or just too stupid to think of in the moment. Still I’m sure it’s gonna get better.

A_Sleepless_dream
A_Sleepless_dreamLv14

What I’m excited to see is how crazy he becomes!!!

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Thanks for the review. Soon the system mission will be back, the the ruthlessness is coming.

Emerald13
Emerald13Author

definitely you will see it soon.

A_Sleepless_dream:What I’m excited to see is how crazy he becomes!!!
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