This is a good fanfiction right here. It’s an interesting concept done very well. The first 15 or so chapters are pretty much unchanged from cannon, which in most cases would be the chapters you want to skip, but in this case it’s actually well done. The characterization in these chapters is great. It’s the perfect progression to where I think his character is going (there isn’t that many chapters yet) and act creatively bends the cannon actions to change your perspective on the MC, which i think is clever. My biggest criticism is the extreme repetition in the writing. It’s great to see a WebNovel mc who isn’t completely unfeeling and coldly logical, but it sometimes feels like hes a broken record going on and on about the same self doubts. Maybe you could use the other characters perspetives more often to break up his walls of text, but idk im not a good writer. Please keep writing this, its an entertaining story that looks like its gonna get pretty spicy soon.
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