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EmptyentityLv136mth
2024-11-08 02:03

A piece of advice: it's better to drop the third-person objective narration style; it's too much tell, never show. Use subjective or even omniscient. We, as readers, want some connection to the inner world of MC, and here, we get none. It's a character-driven story, not a thriller.

DxD: Scion of Lucifuge

DragonnX
4.4
346 Chs

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Kronos_
Kronos_Lv13

From what I've seen so far, the story looks very promising.

6mth

R0B
R0BLv2

The story is not bad, but I don't like "catch all pokemon" vibe. There's no resistance, they are brainwashed by the devil pieces. Mc just do whatever he wants and everything works out. I don't like the fact that he can use infinite amount of devil pieces, because that means he can use more than one on a single person, but he doesn't do that also - a waste.

5mth
GlN
GlNLv2

All you really need to know is that there really isnt any thoughts going through his head. The story goes from point a to point b to point c, theres no side thoughts or goals, the MC is overly blunt and everyone agrees with him. Other characters dont really have any thoughts of their own and takes the MC's words at face value. its most shown in the meeting with Urodaki in the latest chapter.

6mth
Venerable_Read3r
Venerable_Read3rLv5

A bit idealistic gets a system for unlimited servants just one saeko eleavated his power by one level for some reason also he is 16 whil his sister is hundreds of years old where are his parents none of it is said pure wish fulfillment fic I prefer the other dxd novel much better with a better mc and story development among other things

5mth
Octaval_Salt2422
Octaval_Salt2422Lv4

Honestly a lot of potential here, But Really you made this into a pokemon Harem story only about girls girls girls no foreshadowing no risks no excitement all about girls this is getting boring I hardly read 25 chapters maybe remake it and focus on story action adventure no harem for one pls

4mth
DragonnX
DragonnXAuthor

[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

6mth
LuciferMorninStar
LuciferMorninStarLv12

Really good story, we will see what gonna happen next.,............................................................................,................................................................................... .....

6mth
KitsuneLight
KitsuneLightLv2

Solo por tener a akame ga kill y campione tiene mis 5 full y mis dos piedras, por cierto considera agregar family yozakura seria agradable tener a futaba y mutsumi en el harem hahaha.

1mth
No_Mans_english
No_Mans_englishLv4

lemon or no? hhfgcthgdhhshhehdbhdhdhdhhd

3mth
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