Dude, your story is really good, I loved your idea! I can't wait for you to post the next chapters, dear author! I also wanted to let you know that I found some spelling mistakes (it might be the translator's fault, sorry, English is not my first language) and incircumstances with the narrative, like Dr. Volkor (is that the name!? I don't even remember) using "Mind Stone" in a speech he makes to Stryker when he shouldn't even know about it? Additionally, I also found that the timeline used in your story does not match that of the canonical MCU (are you writing with the Marvel Cinematic Universe timeline in mind? Or, are you going to address some elements of the comics? So many questions, man, I hope you don't get upset with this long text of mine) while reading your story, some sentences in the first chapters became a bit repetitive and boring to read, I recommend you try to take a look at this, but otherwise it was great, author! 😉👍 Looking forward to the next update 💖💖💖💖
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Hey, thanks for letting me know! I really appreciate hearing people’s opinions. If you notice any inconsistencies in my writing, definitely let me know—I’ll make sure to fix them. Don’t be afraid to comment and let me know where I messed up too. I’ll take a look at the first chapter in a bit. And no worries, I love constructive criticism! It helps me see what I need to work on and how to improve. Thanks again for reading
Also I am writing with the MCU in mind but will be adding a few comic tidbits here and there!!
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