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histidine
histidineLv117h
2024-11-22 03:54

well i survived only till chapter 12, my main problem is with the MC and the way he is portrayed and acts. first we have here the typical omnipotent MC route, every one is incompetent and stupid just to highlight how amazing the MC is , he is the strongest fighter in the kingdom (which is a stretch but still within tolerance) , best navigator (never shown to learn it) , knows most about commerce (from the way the dialogs go), knows most about the world of one piece(from the way the dialogs go) and etc, the problem is why make him king if he is the best at everything just make him another mihawk and get done with it but my main problem is his behavior, for example he just got his cargo highjacked and his response is "i dont know where they are so lets just go to the grand line and look around" when he is the king of a kingdom and probably has more important things to do than search blindly , another problem is that he doesnt use his system properly even after presumably having the resources to do so , honestly if you dont intend to use it just dont introduce it from the get go or dont make it an universal mall system but some thing else. basically what you did is like those authors who make the MC too OP and then need to nerf him to keep the story going no foresight at all. at least properly explain the system functions and limitations to the readers so that your MC will not look like he is mentally challenged

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Humbuub
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This was interesting but the world background is just bad. For starters author has no idea how the Seas work. He wrote this like all Blue Seas as one big body of water. Bruh South Blue & East Blue is separated by the calm belt and Grandline. Also there's a system, a Universal Mall, but I'm already in ch 16 and we still haven't seen what's inside.

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I am rating myself 5 Star & if you love kingdom-building novels this is for you. I hope you find this interesting.

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Monkey_D_Murda
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I’m glad someone decided to do a proper translation for this story…. Thank you

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Milf_monarch
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5-star review after reading 30+ chapters, what I liked most is that MC is intelligent & he knows the consequences of his actions. The system is also rarely used which I like because I don't like a system if it starts interfering too much. I also read your last Fanfiction; thank you for releasing this fanfiction & please don't drop it.

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anubis1650
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I like the concept of the story unfortunately there's quite a few inconsistencies and the main character constantly contradicts himself saying to hide the power that they're building but then in the next second displays it openly this happens multiple times in multiple situations. This is just my personal opinion but I always hate it when an MC eats a devil fruit if he has any kind of true Talent(haki for the win) or super power/system it usually just makes it too op for good reading but that like I said that's probably me It just doesn't make sense for me that in a world where it's at least 75% or more of water eating a devil fruit(death by water) unless you truly need it to be powerful which if you have either of the two you don't

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Great story so far and the writing and story telling in it is great. It doesn't take place in the current era, but I love stories that are like this

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