I really, really like this novel and think it has incredible potential but it also has a pretty glaring problem that's seriously hurting it for many people. One of its biggest flaws is that something that could be easily and succinctly done in 2 chapters is more often than not stretched out to encompass at least 5 or more chapters by the author using filler, for seemingly no reason but to artificially slow things down. Combine that with the extreme over explanations of things that either don't need to be explicitly explained for one reason or another for the audience to naturally understand it, or are about things that feel misplaced and aren't relevant to that moment, the short term plot, near future or even overall story for a long time to come but is explained in excruciating detail anyway right then and there, putting the whole plot and story on hold until the info dump is over, many times happening several times a chapter and often repeating the same exact info just one or two chapters later without changing anything about it, just a complete copy/paste from before. Further add on the seemingly endless (and mostly off topic) tangents he goes into before, during and after he does anything at all, but especially especially so for fights, meaning he'll need several chapters to kill a low level mob (like a slime) because he's spends so much time on random superfluous tangents that 90% of the buildup and aftermath is just the MC yapping about nothing and repeating the same thoughts and reflections he's already had many times so far, without actually learning from these reflections and needing to go through the same thought processes over again to relearn the conclusion you already came to multiple times before, repeating the steps every 10 chapters or so. Plus the stats and descriptions of things are very often repeated multiple chapters in a row without changing anything, leading to between 30%-40% of a chapter can relatively often be nothing but the same info said in the previous chapter(s), and with the size of each chapter it only feels that much shorter with all the filler and repeats. It kinda feels like if you were to reedit the novel and it's chapters, you could probably remove around 40% of the words and reader would still have the same amount of info and knowledge of the world, the plot and the MC as you would get reading the original novel, only with less filler and faster/(debatably)better pacing Don't get me wrong though because i truly do like this and i know this makes it sound really bad but i do strongly believe others should give it a chance and try it for themselves, i just want it to improve, get better and eventually become one of the all time goats of a story (like "the second coming of gluttony" for example) like it so clearly has the potential to be if its a bit more edited and trimmed down.
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LIKEBut it is very slow going with lots of random rambling in circles by MC/author without actually doing or saying anything or progressing the story further along, so be warned
