I am only 15 chapters in at the moment, but the story has good pacing and good development. The main character is interesting so far. my one comment is that the timeline is very hard to follow. the actual events are fine, but there is no way to tell if one fight or quest happened an hour ago or a week ago. For instance: when she returned to the town of beginnings, until she compared the town to a few weeks ago, it seemed like only maybe one or two days had passed since the death game started. I would recommend saying things like "1 week later" or "a few hours later" to help us follow the timeline. it doesn't have to be large explanations, just a short info sentence or even during line breaks to help us follow along better.
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