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2024-11-11 13:33

The story shows promise, but the linearity of the story is confusing. Characters are introduced and then forgotten quickly. The story itself is confusing and bounces around constantly, especially with the time skips and changes development. Like what happened with his sister or Emerald? why did they just stop being mentioned? What about the rest of his family? Who the hell is Xavier, and why did he get a single mention in a chapter and then never get explained? The story has promised, but it seems like it's steam rolling forward with no linear progression or sense.

SSS-Rank Magus: I Shall Conquer All The Beauties In The New World

Izana07
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Izana07
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Alright thanks for the review, I understand what you mean 🤝I shall get back on the other characters in this arc, they need some screen time too but aside from that, Hows the book looking - is it good?

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I like the premise and the idea of a supreme gods reincarnation. I love overpowered characters, but I also love the build up to that power. You also haven't included his status screen in quite a while or quests from the system. Other than that I do enjoy the book. I'm just having trouble keeping everything in order.

Izana07:Alright thanks for the review, I understand what you mean 🤝I shall get back on the other characters in this arc, they need some screen time too but aside from that, Hows the book looking - is it good?
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Izana07
Izana07Author

✊Thanks man, I’ll work on all those 🤝Your review has been very helpful, I appreciate the love you’re giving this book

noodles_XD:I like the premise and the idea of a supreme gods reincarnation. I love overpowered characters, but I also love the build up to that power. You also haven't included his status screen in quite a while or quests from the system. Other than that I do enjoy the book. I'm just having trouble keeping everything in order.
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I appreciate the openness to feedback. Keep up good work.

Izana07:✊Thanks man, I’ll work on all those 🤝Your review has been very helpful, I appreciate the love you’re giving this book
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