First let me start of by saying the reasons I like this novel. The main selling point is the unusual ability of MC to control insects and his merciles persona. Besides that, I personally think the interaction with the spider girl, Victoria is very cute. I always appreciate a good romance inside a novel—not too dramatic, nor too light—along with strong action sequences. If these two factors remain consistent throughout the novel, I might give it a full read until it's finished. I don't think a brilliant writing quality is necessary to attract someone like me, as long as it's not unbearable grammer or too AI generated, its fine. I don't know in which direction the story is shaping—this early in the novel, so I can't really comment about that. Though, I can feel you are trying to build something solid with the flow it's going. Honestly, and I mean I'll be very frank; I'm in it for the spider girl and well made characters, each having a distinct personality. As for the aspects you can improve on: when shifting from a emotion invoking scene to a different one—completely unrelated to it, try not to include too much details or added information in the following scene. I'm saying this because people, when already stirred with emotions beforehand, tend to skim past the long paragraphs filled with information, because they are forced to surrender the emotional content they felt earlier. Now onto the world building. I feel like you can improve on it; you know... adding a bit more depth and information about the world, or perhaps highlighting the surrounding atmosphere and vibes. Consistent upload schedule is always a given. There is no compromise in this, if you want to have a successful novel in this app, especially at the start. And yea, that's about it.. nothing more I can critique on. Keep up the good work P.S: all of these are simply my personal opinions, and I never claim to be an expert. also P.S: I'm a HUGE sucker for good fluffy romance, and action scene.
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