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2024-09-13 10:42

this story novel is so boring, Bad, and flat, not be recommended

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Good for you 😀. Thanks for the review, I'm still an amateur writer so don't expect more but I still thank you I will further improve my writing and this novel is still not finished so I'm further improving the plot and English is not my first Language so expect some grammatical error if there are any.

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and please stop discouraging my other readers just criticize don't discourage saying to not recommend it.

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