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2024-09-23 10:10

I have read a few chapters. the writing quality is good in my opinion but I think you need to polish your storytelling. You have to add more description to the events that happen during each scene to help people visualise the scenes. looking forward to seeing how it goes

Veilbound: Arcane Awakening

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"Thank you so much for taking the time to read my book and for your thoughtful feedback! I really appreciate your insight, and I agree – adding more descriptive depth to the scenes can definitely enhance the storytelling. I'll keep that in mind as I continue to polish and improve the story. Your support means a lot, and I’m excited to keep growing! Looking forward to hearing what you think as the story develops."

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The writing is very interesting and makes me really look forward to the upcoming developments. The world-building is detailed, too. Keep it up! I hope you continue to improve and succeed!

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It's a very intriguing story and I'm ngl I quite enjoying. I hope to see more from you and if you keep up the hard work. Then your work will begin to be appreciated.✨

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