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SleepySmile
SleepySmileLv143mth
2024-09-19 09:01

The story is really good but you need to add punctuation and space. It's like a brick you have everything stuck together it's really hard to read you don't know when people talk, who talk... if you can fix that it would be really cool.

ascension of the first goddess of yuri in danmachi

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XDestroyer867
XDestroyer867Lv4

Great story just needs better spacing in the paragraphs and quotes to make It easier to read also commas when listing things but other than that it is great I am writing this as of chapter 7 being the most recent one that has come out

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Shadowyin65
Shadowyin65Lv14

It's a good story that manages to capture a reader attention in its own way. You can start to see the improvement of the author throughout the story. The way the characters improve throughout the story is interesting. It's a good read for the most part.

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Oren1
Oren1Lv14

Correct the spacing and the story will be golden.

2mth
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