The author has clearly jumped on the danmachi bandwagon without ever actually watching danmachi, I mean first of all it’s a semi-dark fantasy world, you don’t just pop out of a portal in the middle of the street and shout out that you’re a rich newbie, that’s just asking to get stabbed by a random hobo. And secondly it’s danmachi the gods are basically living lie detectors Hestia would have thrown him out the first sentence that came out of his mouth.

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The concept is ok, the characters are skillfully perceived but which modern person acts like that he screams, goes into dark alleys, uses his superpower without confirming his surroundings and speaks like a fancy person from a 3rd rate Disney movie

It seems normal. But there is a certain feeling of an aura of total stupidity. If at first only the hero seems bad, then later it progresses and spreads.

My god was this painful to read. Like the whole concept was already interesting enough but man did the MC just bring everything down. Dude is straight up an idiot who pretty much just fanboyed early on. This pretty much explained him just joining the Hestia Familia because of it instead of actually having a plan that made sense. You also have some mistakes on Danmachi, just going in without much research. You could have actually had him be a god and form a familia by going to other worlds and recruiting people thus fitting the actual title of your story but instead its just the same join the Hestia Familia thing without any form of originality or creativeness.

I tried I really tried but mc is really dumb and a simp he has broken ability to travel world and has the info to all worlds but does stupid things

good concept, plus the author can actually write 🤣

This story is LEGEGENDARY!!! it has a chance at being one of the GOATS!!! Awesome quality chapters and great character explanation!!! 🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥👍🫡🐐

Reason for my 1 star review? I hate this novel picture.