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2024-08-31 19:48

For a new writer this story is very well put together. The story pacing isn't inconsistent and doesn't have any major jumps for no reason. The main character design (Taka) is a good combination of Aizen and Sukuna, or that is what it looks like at this point in time. He isn't "Evil" just for plot convenience, every action Taka has taken has been true to his characterization. As far as update stability, well we have had a chapter daily. Some days we have had Multiple chapters dropped. The world background, well it's DxD and the original "canon" didn't really explore any of the verse. So any background we see in this will be better. Writing quality, well that speaks for itself. No one has commented any grammar issues or inconsistences. Overall this story is 5/5 for the DxD genre for me.

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The conclusion I came to after reading it was that it is rushed, from the protagonist to the way some characters act or little explanation about their abilities, not just how Mc uses these abilities but how they fictionalize the world in general because the author changed both. many things in the "magic system" that were supposed to affect and change the entire world of the original dxd. 1•The protagonist: He is Chūnibyō inside his head I felt he was a rational person, a little grumpy, of course inside his head because the Author wanted a cosplay of Aizer as Mc on the outside he is very polite at the same time which can be rude sometimes now you ask me where this chūnibyō is, this occurs at random times when the MC seems to have a personality disorder that creates a megalomaniac version of him that only seems to have painful (shameful) thoughts and you know what that's not necessarily bad, far from it, it's great in a villain. The problem is that the villain is also the protagonist, which makes it impossible not to find the way he acts, thinks and speaks funny thanks to these sets that form his psyche (did I forget the place that has a villain flavor? oops) there are several examples of wonderful villains who have some or even all of these sets of personalities like Aizen, Sukuna and I would say even Dio, these villains are supported by two things from my point of view: charisma and their power, one of these two cannot be missing if you You have these two things, you can forget the rest if you want motivations, plans, past, it doesn't matter if you have that. As you can see in my text, the protagonist's charisma is confusing to say the least because the author was very quick to show and develop his personality in relation to power, I explain in the skills. 2• Ways of acting of some characters: They act hastily in relation to the mc, at least those who are not ignored, that is, Akeno and Raynare, it is strange to say the least how quickly they began to treat the mc with confidence and even attraction, since he turned one into a slave and the other has known him for two weeks, the other characters have so little dialogue in relation to these two that it becomes a little strange if you compare them to them. 3•Skills: The Author modified the magic system, especially human magic, making the wizard's magical element more important than it was in the original, at least I think, since even in the beginning where the protagonist is learning magic we only have two paragraphs that explain almost nothing about this subject and finally add, a basic spell like "mana steps" that I think the author doesn't realize how stolen the ability to run at a speed that surpasses the senses of even a supernatural being is . It's a huge exaggeration, especially since with such a useful spell, the demons should have their own version of it (seriously, why don't the demons that showed up have this!?!??!?!) There are a few more things I want to explain further , I'm afraid my perversion in writing great things has gone too far, I'm just going to keep my word to talk about the MC's power here, he gains power at an accelerated pace as he himself says to Kiba "In the space of just over a week , somehow, I reached you all." and like all fast-paced things, I don't think his power gain was good because he's human, a human wizard, who knows what? four different spells? ☝️•The stupidest thing about me writing this is that the author might just write “you're asking too much of a fic” so I'm going to have to go along with that because that's the truth.

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