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2024-10-13 14:53

As the novel is rated 18+ more attention to convey the intimate between the characters is needed as for as now its resemble cracked cision in these parts

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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my book. I appreciate your honest feedback and understand that the relationship development may have felt rushed for you. I'll keep this in mind for future projects.

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