Interesting, but something needs to be done about the names ...........................................................................................

if it wasn't almost illegible it would be a good story, can i vaguely understand whats happening; yes, does it give me a headache; also yes. the primary issue is the names; 'ji chuan' is the name of the nurse and someone is named 'fire extinguisher' and literally 'nameless.' thank god the mc's name is only 5 letters in total so it isn't messed up... often

when I read your synopsis . I understood it like your character would go back to the real world and take on the protagonist there. more specifically the ones sent back in time to play video games and it was your job to take their opportunities away.i even glanced at your chapter titles and saw virus, I thought damn that's a great idea for those mmorpg protagonists. if the computer has a virus then they cant play the game. it wasnt til I read the story that I realized the dungeons were different worlds.

Это хорошо но перевод немного плох[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

The story is interesting but please properly translate it

good fanfi .......................................................................................................................................................

1 punto por no traducir los nombres bien. [img=disgusted][img=disgusted][img=disgusted][img=disgusted][img=disgusted][img=disgusted][img=disgusted][img=disgusted][img=disgusted][img=disgusted][img=disgusted][img=disgusted][img=disgusted][img=disgusted][img=disgusted][img=disgusted][img=disgusted]

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Please edit it, otherwise it's a good story.

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