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2024-09-15 19:10

great author could you please read my novel bussiness mortal.

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This review is based on my opinion and does not reflect the substance of the novel. The story is set in a post-apocalyptic world, but it avoids the common tropes of systems, unknown viruses, or harsh climates. Instead, it carves out its own unique identity. I really enjoyed this fresh take, as it felt different and original compared to similar stories in the genre. Now, moving on to the pros and cons, let’s start with the cons. One of the main issues with the story is that it’s overly descriptive. At times, the author provides so much detail that it feels like information overload. For example, there are chapters that could have been condensed. Instead of spreading a minor arc across six chapters, it could have been efficiently summarized into three. The pacing suffers as a result, making some parts of the story feel drawn out unnecessarily. Another problem is the world leaders’ meeting scene. While the premise of this meeting was intriguing, the execution felt bloated. There was too much information revealed at once, which could have been saved and revealed gradually throughout the story. By doing this, the flow of the narrative would have felt smoother and more engaging. Lastly, the pacing of the early chapters needs improvement. The initial chapters move too slowly, making it hard for the reader to get hooked right away. While things eventually pick up, the slow start can be a hurdle for some readers. PROS The story is fascinating and reeks of originality. It’s so unique and well-crafted that I find myself constantly eager to read the next chapter. The pacing and flow keep you hooked, making it hard to stop once you start. The world-building is exceptional. It’s not a shallow post-apocalyptic setting where the event happens and is forgotten. Instead, it delves deep into the aftermath, showing the lasting consequences of apocalyptic events. For instance, human extinction is a real and ongoing threat in the story. Humanity is struggling to survive against unknown monsters with terrifying abilities, creating an atmosphere of true desperation and survival. What sets this apart from other apocalyptic novels is its realistic approach. It’s not the typical human supremacy narrative where humans immediately conquer or stabilize. Instead, people haven’t even begun to regain control. They’re still struggling to build shelters, adapt, and survive in a hostile world. This realistic depiction gives the story a grounded, authentic vibe that makes the stakes feel real. The attention to detail in the world-building is insane. Every element feels meticulously planned and well-executed. It’s immersive, believable, and truly captivating—absolute cinema. Overall Review I wanted to rate every aspect of the story out of 10 and describe it in detail, but due to constraints, I’ll keep this concise. These ratings are for now and subject to change as the story progresses. 1. Story Development: 8/10 The story hasn’t released enough chapters to warrant a perfect 10, but so far, it’s that good. The narrative has been engaging and shows a lot of promise for further development. 2. Pacing: 6.5/10 While the story itself is interesting, the pacing has some issues, as I’ve already mentioned in the cons. Certain parts feel dragged out unnecessarily, which slightly affects the flow. 3. World-Building: 9.5/10 The introduction to the world was excellent and well-done. It feels immersive and carefully planned. However, since the world is still expanding, I can’t give it a perfect score yet. Its future development will determine whether it reaches a 10. 4. Character Development: 8/10 The main character is introduced well, and we get a good understanding of their role. What stands out is the depth given to side characters. While they aren’t central to the plot, they add substance to the story and avoid being two-dimensional. 5. Plot: 7.5/10 I can’t fully evaluate the plot yet since a lot has yet to be revealed. It’s intriguing so far but remains incomplete. This score could improve as the story progresses and reveals more layers. 6. Power System: Null/10 The power system hasn’t been properly introduced yet. I can’t give a rating for this aspect until more information is revealed. Once it’s established, I’ll revisit this review and provide a proper score. Overall Rating: 8.2/10 This story is worth trying out. It’s unique, engaging, and gives off those “absolute cinema” vibes. As the story continues to develop, I’m sure it will only get better.

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