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JWB_Kante
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2024-08-09 02:35

Great work from the author and thanks for working on this theme, keep it moving

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FantasyLord
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Thank You 😁

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Bpaat39
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I would just like to start off with saying that this novel idea was fantastic and I even quite enjoyed the first 20 chapters. This is despite the consistent spelling mistakes and missing words and just weird sentence structure. ( That persist to chapter 160 +. I checked.) Your story takes a swan dive into ironically enough straight into hell starting from the first paid chapter. Just everything changes. Hades becomes Bipolar which I can live with but then he some how develops a system which you explain pretty okay... ish... But every event you write after that is like you watched too many James Bond movies or just spy movies in general. Hades literally just goes apeshit at random. But then out of nowhere he's just an absolute pushover at the birthday party. Where all he needs to do is either not take out the apple or literally be like "Jk zeus here is your present you are the fairest of them all haha". Even then when he tries to shape the ordeal its like he just froze and melted down like a panic attack. Also, the texting scenes are really rough to read through. Speaking of you made this guy redonkulous level stupid. I have too many reasons to list out but I mean it tracks I guess because he is a mortal in A gods body but every other time you write him he's not an idiot so it really just leaves me feeling off. Sadly im not going to continue with this story which is terrible because again IT REALLY IS a great idea and you had me for the first 20 chapters it doesnt really feel like you reread any of your work and or sat down and planned any of it out.

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The_One_Who_Was · Fantasy
4.7
178 Chs