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Bradley_Killick
Bradley_KillickLv147mth
2024-08-26 18:17

very bad grammar, spelling and such. its still readable but some things dont make sense in chapter 19. a decent smut story but that's all. would be better if the spelling and grammar didnt suck

The middle-aged man.

Ahmed_Koroma_1382
4.8
296 Chs

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Ahmed_Koroma_1382
Ahmed_Koroma_1382Author

I will look into working on my grammar, thank you for the advice.

7mth
Ahmed_Koroma_1382
Ahmed_Koroma_1382Author

I have started using Grammarly to redo the chapters; I will try to improve my writing from now on.

7mth
Ahmed_Koroma_1382
Ahmed_Koroma_1382Author

I went over all the chapters using Grammarly. It should have improved the spelling and grammar. But I won't say it's perfect, as I don't know how perfect Grammarly is, and my English isn't that great.

7mth
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Bradley_Killick
Bradley_KillickLv14

I'll have a read later. at least you probably improved the chapters by a bit.

Ahmed_Koroma_1382:I went over all the chapters using Grammarly. It should have improved the spelling and grammar. But I won't say it's perfect, as I don't know how perfect Grammarly is, and my English isn't that great.
7mth
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Bradley_Killick
Bradley_KillickLv14

this isnt a must but if you can afford it I'd recommend getting a editor. not sure where you can find one and how much but is probably a good idea if you can afford one and think its needed.

Ahmed_Koroma_1382:I went over all the chapters using Grammarly. It should have improved the spelling and grammar. But I won't say it's perfect, as I don't know how perfect Grammarly is, and my English isn't that great.
7mth
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Ahmed_Koroma_1382
Ahmed_Koroma_1382Author

I had to go back over them. The chapters only updated half of the things I fixed, but now I got it where I wanted it. This is more of a hobby than a job for me; I just want to improve for now. And you giving me a heads-up about Grammarly was a big help. I won't be getting an editor as I am not that invested in this right now. This is the first novel that I have started. It's my novel that I will use to get my footing.

Bradley_Killick:this isnt a must but if you can afford it I'd recommend getting a editor. not sure where you can find one and how much but is probably a good idea if you can afford one and think its needed.
7mth
Bradley_Killick
Bradley_KillickLv14

good luck. thanks for editing them again.

Ahmed_Koroma_1382:I had to go back over them. The chapters only updated half of the things I fixed, but now I got it where I wanted it. This is more of a hobby than a job for me; I just want to improve for now. And you giving me a heads-up about Grammarly was a big help. I won't be getting an editor as I am not that invested in this right now. This is the first novel that I have started. It's my novel that I will use to get my footing.
7mth
Zarion116
Zarion116Lv15

Nobody who is posting here for free should need to use an editor.

6mth
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this book is so dope! please author, keep updating coz you have just gotten yourself a new fan

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Reveal spoiler

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Shameless author here, I would like to thank you for reading my novel. And any helpful advice would me most appreciated. I would like to thank y'all once again.

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leme gime all my powerstones ta ya definitely recommend 😙👌

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Zarion116
Zarion116Lv15

Hey dude your missing the tattoo artist in your harem list just now noticed during the re read. Also check your author comments. I left you a comment.

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ShiroNeko280
ShiroNeko280Lv4

It would be really great if the author writes the mc's and his late wife's past as a side story, and his daughters' childhood ( from young age to 17 yo) as a side story.

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Zarion116
Zarion116Lv15

Why the abruptness in going to Japan I though volume 2 is a solid highschool conquer arc?

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Zarion116
Zarion116Lv15

It’s really good sorry to spam. I commented on a bunch of the pics the yandere pic needs work. Plus there’s some you know you gotta get to etc. but I’m just happy with it all. Hope some of my pic comments made you laugh

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Zarion116
Zarion116Lv15

Congrats on reaching 200 - I hope to see plenty of highschool arcs. So many pigtails. Don’t neglect Anna & friends plus the highschool girls he has already. You really gotta set up a discord with character photos.

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