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Ichorblut
IchorblutLv44mth
2024-08-16 01:16

First off, I just started reading this particular story because of Megumi. Of course, I am familiar with the Quintuplets, but I am not a fan of rom-coms. However, this is very well executed, the premise of Megumi someone who is traumatized and depressed, helping five different girls. The themes are pretty clear. obviously romance, family, and fear/anxiety. That's my synopsis or summary. Some minor criticism from me, it's pretty noticeable that the lack of a large cast of characters is harmful. Because as soon as a scene involving the siblings starts or ends, it's easy to tell what is going to happen. Though you gave them more depth. Also, the aspect of JJK is very small so far and currently not relevant, considering the circumstances. However, I do hope it will be involved more in the future. What I think is very well executed, is the drama. It is rather easy to get immersed in. That's mostly because of the character interactions and dialogues. Everyone acts in a way that fits their character (else it would be probably harder to integrate Bumgumi), which makes the character arcs more compelling and understandable. Another strong quality is the length and release of the chapters. Until now, new chapters come after 1 or 2 days, and as already said they are pretty long (I estimate ~2000 words per chapter, take it with a grain of salt, tho). The overall writing is very satisfying, not the usual forced sophisticated style or over-descriptions and straight to the point, but not necessarily dumbed down. It's pretty familiar and approachable. I would like to see in which other directions the author can go after this fanfiction and am still very thrilled for more.

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TJohnS
TJohnSAuthor

I loved your review, man. It's these kinds of comments that inspire me to keep writing! And about the small cast, that's a problem that I agree with and I'm afraid I'll have to resolve as soon as possible. 🫡

Ichorblut
IchorblutLv4

Nice to hear. I have a question, did you come up with this fanfic because of Megumi or did you want to write one about the Quintuplets in mind? Why this particular anime combination?

TJohnS:I loved your review, man. It's these kinds of comments that inspire me to keep writing! And about the small cast, that's a problem that I agree with and I'm afraid I'll have to resolve as soon as possible. 🫡
TJohnS
TJohnSAuthor

I saw this image and thought "Lol that's funny asf, I wonder what it would be like if the two universes merged into one". I chose Megumi as the main character by elimination criteria. In short, I am clinically insane.

Ichorblut:Nice to hear. I have a question, did you come up with this fanfic because of Megumi or did you want to write one about the Quintuplets in mind? Why this particular anime combination?
Ichorblut
IchorblutLv4

I see... you are the most sane JJK fan. By the way, will you open up a discord server in the future?

TJohnS:I saw this image and thought "Lol that's funny asf, I wonder what it would be like if the two universes merged into one". I chose Megumi as the main character by elimination criteria. In short, I am clinically insane.
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TJohnS
TJohnSAuthor

Maybe someday. If you want to, send me a request: tjohnsss I'm kinda busy rn so I may take a while to accept it tho

Ichorblut:I see... you are the most sane JJK fan. By the way, will you open up a discord server in the future?
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