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Jadeite7885
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2024-11-11 01:42

The story is good my only issue would be the writing quality since it is a bit confusing. I also can’t seem to get emotionally attached to it since it’s too fast paced and even at chapter 15 the mc only seems to be attached to one character. Here is an example from chapter 15: “Second, transfiguration will blind all of the same type in a single lump, from which it will be possible to get factions with the desired characteristics. Of course, this is a noticeable overconsumption of power, but each spell makes the wizard a tiny fraction stronger. The same Dumbledore for a hundred years so evolved that I am against its background a modest fire of a tired traveler, against a flaming haystack doused with gasoline.”

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This is very likely just ai written

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