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Rimuru_tempest6969
Rimuru_tempest6969Lv115mth
2024-07-13 17:40

The quality of writing needs to be improved. I hope the author could improve as the story progresses. The things that author needs to keep in mind is try to go for shorter paragraph which makes smartphone users for easier read. Also try to express the characters feelings as right now it feels bland and mc looks like a machine. Also try to describe the new background. The fanfic is good I hope the author can further improve it.

Snow mage of the Clover Kingdom

Treyvon_Black
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Treyvon_Black
Treyvon_BlackAuthor

Thanks for the input this my first fanfic so I'm still learning but thanks for the input

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Rimuru_tempest6969
Rimuru_tempest6969Lv11

try reading free chapters of webnovel for insight in writing. I actually like the fanfic😁😁😌

Treyvon_Black:Thanks for the input this my first fanfic so I'm still learning but thanks for the input
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thesacredmenace
thesacredmenaceLv12

At the start the story is nothing new for a black clover fanfic but as story Progresses the writing get better and more interesting . The Mc joins the silvereagles instead of the Black bulls which is so rare in this fics. plus mimosa is the FL (as of right now ) which I love hopefully it’s no harem , fingers crossed . hope this goes far.

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LuciasAzrael
LuciasAzraelLv4

I just started chapter 4 so this may be too early of a review, but I can't deny that i am enjoying this story, I'm not gonna go into depth yet cause I'm only on chapter 4, but I'm putting this here for the author, so he can become more motivated to make more chapters, i truly hope this will make it to the end of black clover, I know it may be wishful thinking, but a man can dream

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August_fallenfrost
August_fallenfrostLv3

The writing is good but it has a lot of grammar errors. The overall story is amazing and I love how even though the MC is powerfull he’s not completely broken like most MC’s are. I understand that the author is going through a difficult period at the moment of me writing this but I just wanted to say to anyone who what’s to read this that the story is amazing and I highly recommend and encourage you to read it.

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