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MalonElris
MalonElrisLv111mth
2024-11-28 04:42

I didn't like this story at first. I enjoy faster power ups etc. but I won't lie I toughed it out, the main character grows on you. is self aware, and actually knows he is hypocritical sometimes. his harem are all unique personalities. smut was creative and not generic. my only only complaint and it's very light. is it took so long for a significant power up/relationship with main lady. frustrating but that's the point I guess making you invested. if you like villain stories and harem, absolutely no reason to skip this.

Primordial Villain with a Slave Harem

NecroBin
4.5
484 Chs

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NecroBin
NecroBinAuthor

Thanks for the kind words! You're right, I was a much worse author back at the start than I am right now. Pacing was an issue, but the 'main girl' (she's only really the first, not the main, I try to give all of them equal screentime) was intentionally taking long to fall, I think it fit her personality perfectly. What I wish I could change the most in the earlier parts are cutting out a lot of descriptions, I went a bit too heavy on them for certain, and you're right, the first major power up should've arrived slightly sooner.

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MalonElris
MalonElrisLv11

haha. glad you took it as compliment. Im almost at privilege chapters 🤣. and as for why I thought ayame was main girl was the mental chat that quin had with her at the slavers. the "secret" he reveals. insuiating she was the most balanced to be the first or above them. either way i hope you are happy I'm invested now 🤣😭

NecroBin:Thanks for the kind words! You're right, I was a much worse author back at the start than I am right now. Pacing was an issue, but the 'main girl' (she's only really the first, not the main, I try to give all of them equal screentime) was intentionally taking long to fall, I think it fit her personality perfectly. What I wish I could change the most in the earlier parts are cutting out a lot of descriptions, I went a bit too heavy on them for certain, and you're right, the first major power up should've arrived slightly sooner.
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NecroBin
NecroBinAuthor

I'm happy as can be!

MalonElris:haha. glad you took it as compliment. Im almost at privilege chapters 🤣. and as for why I thought ayame was main girl was the mental chat that quin had with her at the slavers. the "secret" he reveals. insuiating she was the most balanced to be the first or above them. either way i hope you are happy I'm invested now 🤣😭
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1_EyedKing
1_EyedKingLv12

Haha yes the early chapters were sometimes a chore to read but once I did, it got better over time and I’m loving it now…ngl I love all the harem girls and they all get equal screen time, which is very rare in harem novels and most girls are forgotten or are mentioned very rarely, which was not done here, I’d prefer if you didn’t increase the harem to a huge number as that would again cause the previous issue and honestly having a harem of more than 20 girls is way too much, like in the famous WebNovel my three wives are beautiful vampires where the mc has like 50 wives (not kidding) honestly for me at the very least Quinlan having more than 15 women would be too much, but it’s your story and if you are able to balance it properly, I’ve got no complaints. Currently I’m loving Seraphiel so much! My favorite character right now and I loved the fact that Quinlan went back to buy the se*y Elf Slave he first came across back in day 2 😭 that’s certainly something most people would do, he’s been very relatable from chapter 1 which has also made me greatly enjoy the story

NecroBin:Thanks for the kind words! You're right, I was a much worse author back at the start than I am right now. Pacing was an issue, but the 'main girl' (she's only really the first, not the main, I try to give all of them equal screentime) was intentionally taking long to fall, I think it fit her personality perfectly. What I wish I could change the most in the earlier parts are cutting out a lot of descriptions, I went a bit too heavy on them for certain, and you're right, the first major power up should've arrived slightly sooner.
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NecroBin
NecroBinAuthor

Thanks for giving my novel a chance. I believe that you won't regret it. The MC is greedy, possessive, and scheming. He starts out as an opportunistic anti-hero more than an actual villain, but quickly begins slipping. However, if your idea of 'villain' is someone who skins puppies alive just for fun while cackling manically then he will never become a true villain. My idea of a 'villain' is someone who is severely lacking any moral limitations that stop him from doings things that would make him stronger, and also having very low empathy levels for outsiders. As for the harem part, I prefer small harems where each member has an actual reason to exist beyond being eye candies and trophies for the MC to show off. Therefore, each lady has an important role to play in the story, with each having at least a mini arc before/when joining, and will almost certainly have an entire future arc centered around them. You can expect about one woman/60-80 chapters average I would say. If you have any questions or comments don't hesitate to state them. Enjoy the ride! No NTR, no yuri.

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1_EyedKing
1_EyedKingLv12

Ok so for the people looking to see if you should red this, I’m going to be very honest…the starting is kinda off coz the author just behave writing and he takes a while to get into his flow, but once he does the novel quality improves greatly…the main character is relatable, and the BEST part is that none of the Harem members are forgotten and each get equal screen time and interactions with the main character and the story in general. Every character is really well done, there have even been characters who first came off as obnoxious and arrogant, but they go through great character development and grow on you. So please do give it a try. It’s a great slice of life harem story, the main character is a villain who does what’s needed for himself, but he has morals he doesn’t go after innocent people and just slaughter cities for fun he is willing to rob and kill if they help him reach his goals, he mostly kills bad guys but he’s not one to be a hero for no reason especially when him and his loved ones could be in danger.

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LightYagami2000
LightYagami2000Lv13

A marvelous example of what not to write. A truly cursed piece of literature that belongs in the realm of trash. Authors of novels like these like to think of themselves as sophisticated individuals that're challenging the norm by writing harem cr*p, while in reality they're just insecure edgy mor*ns who get off on writing stuff like this.

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Hijak
HijakLv15

What a gem. Great MC development Great story Great Harem design and development My favorite part is the back story of the characters and how it explains how most villians are created and not born. Watching good people turn to the dark side based on the happenstance is truly enjoyable.

1mth
Entomodachi
EntomodachiLv12

Great story, very addictive! I like that the main character is not an usual goody two shoes hero.

3mth
Daoist913668
Daoist913668Lv3

Very well written, dialogues are lively and interesting, character development is great, MC is competent, the system isn t the end all be all. 4 stars on the world because I m sure this author could have created something even better. That and I am a pos. Sorry author, I mean good things :D

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Synge64
Synge64Lv15

Great book, keep it up author! I have no idea if you have other stuff, but I am definitely going to check it out after I finish writing this.

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Micke1
Micke1Lv4

Very addictive[img=update][img=update][img=update]

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DarkR1vers_Leander
DarkR1vers_LeanderLv4

great book,awesome character development ..I like the way the mc does not depend on the system..A very funny book..Thanks man keep up the good work..

3mth
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