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2024-07-16 02:21

Ohk so I love the way she writes very professionally almost no grammatical errors but it's not perfect let's start with the good things because It has more things in its favor then against it GOOD THINGS I like the how story is presented characters even tho lack somethings but are not cardboard cutouts it's romance so I was expecting no story at all but I love where this is going the way dialogues are handled has to be my favorite thing about this it's just beautiful BAD THINGS the opening chapter is well a pretty good chapter but I think it shouldn't be the opening it introduced too many characters which were a bit hard to follow what would have been better if they were introduced with intervals of 100 words pacing is off I think the transition between first half of the chapter and second half could have been handled better THE AUTHOR HAS POTENTIAL THEY AREN'T STUPID THEY NO WHAT TO DO AND THEY ARE PASSIONATE ABOUT IT I LOLOVE THAT

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