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NxSyth
NxSythLv14mth
2024-07-06 17:41

The author has introduced some creative ideas into this fanfiction mainly about magic, that has been very interesting to read although the charactors all sound nearly the same, the author should try changing how he/she words things in every charactors perspective, also I think the author's portrayal of Dumbledore is faulty, in this fanfiction Dumbledore sounds like a middle aged man without any of the usual Dumbledore wisdom, the use of ai is destroying the story, the wording is terribly redundant in some areas and reading this awfully bland writing style makes me want to tear out my hair.

A Skeptical Slytherins Revolution

Joebiden_Biden
4.3
35 Chs

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lobsxz
lobsxzLv14

a good idea. I only have one problem the paragraph are to full, so it's hard to focus. I advise to to shortening it like instead of making it the for the same amount of word's

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Troy34
Troy34Lv1

Hello, I love reading through your story, i enjoy the energy you gathered together but it has low engagers I would like to discuss something with you that will help the engagement of your book 📚📚📖

4mth
ReadinSomeShit
ReadinSomeShitLv14

I really enjoy your development, characters, and grammar but it’s gotten really really weird to continually remind myself this is STILL about someone barely a toddler. Seriously, please age her up.

4mth
ChanceofRice
ChanceofRiceLv1

Fun and insightful. Hopefully, this story does not go the way of most fanfics. I wish the author great success if only for the fact that the story they are writing is a great read.

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_Wessix4Ever
_Wessix4EverLv13

the English is good but the character is already doing things the most full grown wizards wouldnt even try like If you think turning into an animal is dangerous try messing with ur brain mcgonagall. it leaves me concerned that the character will be so ridiculously overpowered that any problems or conflict they encounter will be redundant since they'll solve it easily

4mth
Anmortis
AnmortisLv4

Will there be romance? If so, will it be F/M or yuri?

3mth
Multi_conqueror
Multi_conquerorLv1

I probably read every hp fanfic and this one can be placed first 30 easily don't think too low there's more than 100 hp fanfic in the list . Only thing I worry is mc being overpowered in later chapters but with time skips and creativity.

4mth
Neoalgas
NeoalgasLv15

the story has started a bit slow but has great potential looking forward to how it develops

4mth
Fat_Elf
Fat_ElfLv3

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