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2024-07-26 18:53

From what I see the stability of the updates is nice - not that I look at that normally, as I know myself that sometimes it's difficult to write and post all the time ^^ I like the language used here - not too fancy, but not too basic. Perfect in-between so that even people who aren't native to English may enjoy the story without getting confused. As for characters - what I loved most was when I spotted a Polish name (makes me wonder if you too Dear Author, like me, are Polish ;) ). It's still pretty early but I think both the characters and the world are evolving nicely. I have one recommendation - the dialogue options would be more visible and it would be easier to read if you'd use B or I with them - it is a bit tiring on the eyes without it <3 I hope Dear Author you'll see this as an encouragement to keep writing. One day you'll get more words like this, so keep it up - sharing your imagination with the world is a beautiful thing, so don't stop :)

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Aicy_Riet
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Thank you very much for such an honest review. I will do well to follow your advice and continue to do my best☺️. And as for my nationality, I am not Polish. But I do find Polish names beautiful.

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Then even more reason to thank you for that and for thinking this way about Polish names <3 I would love to check out your story and see it grow. I'm cheering on you ^^

Aicy_Riet:Thank you very much for such an honest review. I will do well to follow your advice and continue to do my best☺️. And as for my nationality, I am not Polish. But I do find Polish names beautiful.
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