Seems okay so far. A proofreader would definitely increase the rating, the writing is a bit rough. Cant say much about character or story development yet because it has just begun. Looking forward for the future of this fanfic. Keep up the good work author.
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LIKEGood! I like your positivity. Even though it is true that the writing is rough, you will get better with practice and it is also brave of you to write even though you could face scorn for your language skills. I am inspired.