webnovel
Lynxsie
LynxsieLv124mth
2024-10-02 05:43

I would rate this higher but the problem right now is the early chapters are all messed up. Ch 8 has about 1/4th the content compares to the other chapters and I believe alot of the beginning chapters are missing because of the fact a whole battle sequence that had yet to start mysteriously skipped to days after it happened ( there are no time skips listed either ). Ch 16 has half of ch 15 mixed into it ( The chapter title appears half way down ). Then you basically are tossed random character's names because you aren't introduced to them at all (I'm assuming these were the missing chapters) and the MC has talked to them multiple times before. Example: Liliana randomly comes to MC's work and kisses her on the cheek and they start talking about the business they do together but it's never mentioned prior to this. This book has potential if the author would go back and fix what they missed.

Liked by 2 people

LIKE
Replies3
C_Ryan_H
C_Ryan_HAuthor

[img=recommend]Hi Lynxise! I worked on the begaining of the book while I was busy with the other one. So by the time when I start focusing on this one, it has been like three or four months since the first part was finished. I'll take your advice and go revise the first 30 chapters. Thank you again for your advice!

Lynxsie
LynxsieLv12

I just thought of one more thing; It's explained that they have mechs and super powers but if they have powers why do they need mechs? The way the academy takes people is if they have powers but why would you need to take a mech driving test then? Maybe normal citizens could use mechs but what is the point with super power users? Are mechs more powerful than super powers or are they only more powerful in the lower ranks? Like a rank 5 isn't as strong as a B tier mech but a higher rank has more power than the highest tier mech. So let's say max rank is 20, could a rank 15 beat an S-tier mech? Would the higher rankers look at mechs with disgust because they only use their super powers in the high levels? Can a normal person use mechs or is there some sort of cutoff? How rare are super power ability users? Are there 1 out of every 1000? or 10,000? Then you have to wonder if there is prejudice against certain super powers? Like are there certain super power ability user factions - Frozen faction ( Any frost type ability user ) in the academy and all that ( I haven't gotten that far yet ).

C_Ryan_H:[img=recommend]Hi Lynxise! I worked on the begaining of the book while I was busy with the other one. So by the time when I start focusing on this one, it has been like three or four months since the first part was finished. I'll take your advice and go revise the first 30 chapters. Thank you again for your advice!
C_Ryan_H
C_Ryan_HAuthor

Hi Lynxis! Glad to see you again! Here’s a metaphor for that: In our military, we have incredibly strong soldiers, but we still need more powerful weapons like fighter jets or warships. This is because warfare takes many forms; it’s not always one-on-one combat—sometimes the battle happens in the sky or at sea. In this story, everyone has superpowers, which makes them like “strong soldiers.” You could think of mechas as fighter jets; they allow the pilot to fight in a wider range of environments. At the same time, mechas can certainly provide attack power beyond the pilot’s own abilities, but due to their high cost, not everyone can have one, which is why individual superpowers are still very important.

Lynxsie:I just thought of one more thing; It's explained that they have mechs and super powers but if they have powers why do they need mechs? The way the academy takes people is if they have powers but why would you need to take a mech driving test then? Maybe normal citizens could use mechs but what is the point with super power users? Are mechs more powerful than super powers or are they only more powerful in the lower ranks? Like a rank 5 isn't as strong as a B tier mech but a higher rank has more power than the highest tier mech. So let's say max rank is 20, could a rank 15 beat an S-tier mech? Would the higher rankers look at mechs with disgust because they only use their super powers in the high levels? Can a normal person use mechs or is there some sort of cutoff? How rare are super power ability users? Are there 1 out of every 1000? or 10,000? Then you have to wonder if there is prejudice against certain super powers? Like are there certain super power ability user factions - Frozen faction ( Any frost type ability user ) in the academy and all that ( I haven't gotten that far yet ).
Other Reviews
Related Stories

Operation Honey Trap vs The Emperor of the Apocalypse

[WARNING: MATURE CONTENT] The Emperor’s runaway brides have formed a rebel group of scantily clad beauties trained in honey trap techniques. Delphi Chastain is their leader, a fiery beauty with a big axe to grind and a dream of freedom she’s willing to die for. EXTRACT: ““Kiss me baby?” she breathed in her best babydoll voice. “Are you sure?” he growled. She nodded, fluttering her pretty green eyes at him. He didn’t have to be asked twice. Alton pinned her arms above her head and kissed her roughly with all of the force of the desire he was feeling. Three, two, one! she counted in her head. She bit his lip at the same time as she brought her knee up as hard as she could and kneed the man in the groin. He grunted with pain and fell sideways off her, clutching his bollocks. She leapt to her feet and sprinted off, picking up her belongings on the way past. “Thanks for saving me Commander,” she called cheerily at him as she ran away. “Sorry about the crown jewels, but I’m not going back to the palace, so I don’t need them.” Post-WW3 there’s just the Island, and it’s ruled by the Emperor. It’s back to the good old days of polygamy and keeping women covered and chaperoned. The Emperor has raised Delphi and seven other gorgeous girls in the palace to join his harem, training and surgically enhancing them, like treats in a fantasy smorgasbord. But the girls escape and sail off the Island to the uninhabited Mainland, now overrun by mutant tubiàn beasts created as weapons during the War. Hot on their tails are the Emperor’s Honour Guard. Delphi leads the Girls over, under (^_-), and through the enemy, as they battle and tame beasts and men in their struggle to build an army to take down the Empire. Can the girls survive on their own on the Mainland and build a rebel army? Are there any trustworthy men, or are they all the same? Can the Guards resist the charms of the warrior girls? Do they want to? #enemiestolovers #sexywarrior #r18 #smut #post-apocalypse #war #action #fastpaced #scifi #betrayal #revenge #beast taming #battleofthesexes

ShuiShu · Sci-fi
Not enough ratings
160 Chs

Caring for Mr. Mutant

[COMPLETED] How can a Mutant and a Mutant Caretaker fight for their love, if science is their greatest enemy? ------------------------ Year 2023: Random DNA mutations suddenly occurred around the world. These mutations caused newborn babies to acquire animal traits, and no one knows why or where they originated. Year 2033: When funds, advanced technology, and a capable workforce became available to study these mutants, a national team of scientists was formed, called the "DNA Mutation Cadre" or "D.M. Cadre". They were given modern, state-of-the-art laboratories complete with equipment and isolation rooms. Here, mutants were studied and monitored in exchange for a large sum of money and government assistance. Year 2048: In the busy city of Makylee, a 25-year-old part-timer, Lia Brentvale, got fired from her two part-time jobs in just one unlucky day. Since her parents aren’t around, she’s the breadwinner of her family, providing for her two college brothers. She applied as a Mutant Caretaker in the D.M. Cadre Research Facility and after passing their exam, she was assigned to the mysterious and aloof vulture mutant. But as she got to know him, she also learned more about D.M. Cadre. Together with her hacker friend and their batchmates, they tried to uncover the deep secrets that lie within the research facility. ------------------------ PREVIEW: Aesop had always felt that being a mutant is a curse. But upon meeting Lia, he started accepting himself. Lia was always pointing out his strong points. She was always encouraging him to enhance his skills and discover his talents. She always tells him not to think of himself as a test subject just like how the scientists treat him. She reassured him that even though he's a mutant, he's not less than a person, so he shouldn't look down on himself. It was her uplifting words and her mere existence that gave color to his monochrome life. "Lia… I love you," Aesop uttered as his golden eyes stared through her deep blue eyes. "Ae, I… I love you, too," Lia then wrapped her arms around Aesop's neck, drawing in close to him. Aesop's hands slid down to Lia's lower back, and he embraced her. Their heartbeats quicken as their lips graze against each other. Lia thought it would be just a simple kiss, just like they had always done after their very first kiss, but she was wrong. Aesop's right hand suddenly caressed her back, then he placed it at the back of her head, pulling her to him with a little force. The vulture mutant's majestic wings enveloped them, and it was as if he was owning her. Aesop's wet tongue slid into her mouth, and it surprised her. She tried to resist, but with his hand at the back of her head, she couldn't get away from him. Eventually, she gave in to that passionate kiss... NOTE: Not a superhero story, but tackled more of science ethics and social issues ------------------------ UPDATE: Added CFMM Special - The Afterstory chapters after the Finale. Happy reading! ;) ------------------------ WEBNOVEL CONTENT EDITOR: Ms. Qianyu BOOK COVER by @omichiart on IG SPECIAL THANKS: tricks, Wang Cult, Aquila Official Instagram: @ainawang.official Official Discord: https://discord.gg/HYkU3Rr Patreon: https://www.patreon.com/ainawang

AinaWang · Sci-fi
4.8
209 Chs

Seen Zone Z

(On Hiatus) I love you" doesn't always mean "I'll stay." {February 13, 11:59 pm} Lucas: It's all my fault. I'm so sorry. Remember that I will always love you my moonshine. {Sunday, 6:00 am} Erin: What are you speaking hon? Sorry, I fell asleep. Why didn't you come home? Seen Erin: Hon? Seen Erin: Why are you not replying? Seen Erin: Please say something. Is it due to work? Or something else? Erin: I'll get back. I heard some loud noise outside the house. You better have replied and explained things when I'm back. Seen ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- During the night before Valentines', Luke Maygram sent a mysterious message to Erin Beverly. The next day the world turned upside down as a break out of zombies changed everything. Left with the only text she got from her fiance and the mysterious 'seen' in her every message, she decided to look for him. But will she able to make it and see Lucas again? when the world becomes a living hell? Will love still conquers everything on end? ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Disclaimer: This story is pure fiction. All the names and places you might find similar are purely coincidental. All rights reserved. A/N: This story is made by me, Lala_sanara, and my co-author and friend Ysaa. We are still newbies in the world of everything. So every vote, comment, and review would greatly help us. (Notice: This story will go to editing and some revision might occur too.)

Aeipathy_02 · Sci-fi
4.7
145 Chs

The Marshal's Wife is Wild

[Interstellar+Spiritual Power+Pure Romance+Marriage First, Love After+Livestreaming+Gourmet Food+Disguises] Reborn overnight, Qu Tong cried to death; her vast wealth was gone, and she even ended up owing a billion in taxes. Stuck with a cheap husband her cousin didn't want who can't have children? Rarely comes home? And throws in an entire planet to boot? Qu Tong wondered if there could be such good fortune? She carefully guarded her full fertility value, perfunctorily yet sincerely playing the role of a big shot's dainty wife. She grew energy fruits and vegetables, fed them on schedule, and incidentally improved the food for the entire squad by taking care of their home. The Insect Clan attacked, His Highness was injured, ditching class to visit, pah! To check in. His Highness was too aloof; unable to charm him after a long time, she went online searching for strategies and even inquired about how to reasonably inherit all of her husband's wealth in the case of divorce. The next day, Si Yuting glanced at the top search trends, then looked at his guilt-ridden dainty wife and laughed, "That's difficult, considering I'm just divorced, not dead." Well-behaved and clever in front of others, behind their backs she did nothing of the sort. When her shop was reported, she cursed everyone who dissed her in the comment section one by one and blocked them all, leaving the netizens stunned: "Who taught her to curse like that?!!" In the academy competition, the enemy lacked honor, ganging up to bully the weak; Qu Tong pulled out a potion, directly turned the tables, and kicked them all out of the competition—no one can play me for a fool. When encountering a Star Thief, Qu Tong reassured everyone, "Don't panic, I'll go reason with them." Then she single-handedly drove her mecha, cornering the Star Thief: "This is a robbery, hand over everything valuable." ... One day. Qu Tong, holding her medical report, asked, "If I say I can reproduce asexually, would you believe me?" "Guess."

Heart Language · Sci-fi
Not enough ratings
489 Chs