I would rate this higher but the problem right now is the early chapters are all messed up. Ch 8 has about 1/4th the content compares to the other chapters and I believe alot of the beginning chapters are missing because of the fact a whole battle sequence that had yet to start mysteriously skipped to days after it happened ( there are no time skips listed either ). Ch 16 has half of ch 15 mixed into it ( The chapter title appears half way down ). Then you basically are tossed random character's names because you aren't introduced to them at all (I'm assuming these were the missing chapters) and the MC has talked to them multiple times before. Example: Liliana randomly comes to MC's work and kisses her on the cheek and they start talking about the business they do together but it's never mentioned prior to this. This book has potential if the author would go back and fix what they missed.
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[img=recommend]Hi Lynxise! I worked on the begaining of the book while I was busy with the other one. So by the time when I start focusing on this one, it has been like three or four months since the first part was finished. I'll take your advice and go revise the first 30 chapters. Thank you again for your advice!
I just thought of one more thing; It's explained that they have mechs and super powers but if they have powers why do they need mechs? The way the academy takes people is if they have powers but why would you need to take a mech driving test then? Maybe normal citizens could use mechs but what is the point with super power users? Are mechs more powerful than super powers or are they only more powerful in the lower ranks? Like a rank 5 isn't as strong as a B tier mech but a higher rank has more power than the highest tier mech. So let's say max rank is 20, could a rank 15 beat an S-tier mech? Would the higher rankers look at mechs with disgust because they only use their super powers in the high levels? Can a normal person use mechs or is there some sort of cutoff? How rare are super power ability users? Are there 1 out of every 1000? or 10,000? Then you have to wonder if there is prejudice against certain super powers? Like are there certain super power ability user factions - Frozen faction ( Any frost type ability user ) in the academy and all that ( I haven't gotten that far yet ).
C_Ryan_H:[img=recommend]Hi Lynxise! I worked on the begaining of the book while I was busy with the other one. So by the time when I start focusing on this one, it has been like three or four months since the first part was finished. I'll take your advice and go revise the first 30 chapters. Thank you again for your advice!
Hi Lynxis! Glad to see you again! Here’s a metaphor for that: In our military, we have incredibly strong soldiers, but we still need more powerful weapons like fighter jets or warships. This is because warfare takes many forms; it’s not always one-on-one combat—sometimes the battle happens in the sky or at sea. In this story, everyone has superpowers, which makes them like “strong soldiers.” You could think of mechas as fighter jets; they allow the pilot to fight in a wider range of environments. At the same time, mechas can certainly provide attack power beyond the pilot’s own abilities, but due to their high cost, not everyone can have one, which is why individual superpowers are still very important.
Lynxsie:I just thought of one more thing; It's explained that they have mechs and super powers but if they have powers why do they need mechs? The way the academy takes people is if they have powers but why would you need to take a mech driving test then? Maybe normal citizens could use mechs but what is the point with super power users? Are mechs more powerful than super powers or are they only more powerful in the lower ranks? Like a rank 5 isn't as strong as a B tier mech but a higher rank has more power than the highest tier mech. So let's say max rank is 20, could a rank 15 beat an S-tier mech? Would the higher rankers look at mechs with disgust because they only use their super powers in the high levels? Can a normal person use mechs or is there some sort of cutoff? How rare are super power ability users? Are there 1 out of every 1000? or 10,000? Then you have to wonder if there is prejudice against certain super powers? Like are there certain super power ability user factions - Frozen faction ( Any frost type ability user ) in the academy and all that ( I haven't gotten that far yet ).
