The story is too rushed... if it was slowed down and filled in dialogue and some conflict before they went to another world I think it would be better. And for Aizen, it's better if you revise the chapter at the 1/2 to make it frustrating When he finds out that he is just a fictional character, the story will feel like it has emotions.
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