Make sure to leave a review folks! Planning on releasing 2-3 chapters per day for a while, so hope you guys enjoy it. I will gladly accept any criticism as my writing is still a little rusty

Sentence structure, grammar, and punctuation are all great, making for a very palatable and easy to read story. Very fast updates is nice. I understand that as a fanfic you may want to get right into the meat and potatoes asap but the lightspeed pacing makes it a bit hard to immerse into and connect with our MC and other characters. MC's growth, while natural and understandable, doesn't feel earned from the perspective of a reader. Like yes, he did take months, if not years to master some abilities, but almost none of them were done through dangerous moments as is typical in a series like One Piece. He safely trains BTS and we get a time skip to when he hits a milestone. I think the story would of benefited from each upgrade having come through an arduous event. World building is great of course, it's One Piece after all, and the author applies it quite well in this fanfic with many different settings for each "arc".

My only problem is how fast the strength progression is especially since you called systems cheese yet he arguably gets stronger faster in this fic than most system fanfictions, this guy is either blessed asf or written to get everything like how he has advanced arm n obs by chapter 13 or smth, honestly ion like the story but its still alr

i just want to see this coming ....................................................................................................................................

haven't read it but there are only a few fanfiction without a system as a crutch.

Honestly, I was pleasantly surprised when I started reading, the character is organically integrated into the world, he gains strength not from a momentary buff out of nowhere, but from pain, labor and blood. The main character is also interesting in his own right, the narrative from the Marines' point of view is also pleasant and logical, and the other characters and interactions with them are also interesting to read. In general, before I started reading I didn’t expect anything, but here you have a hidden gem

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keep writing man...very nice story.... don't abondon the story midway

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