Yeah, no. I couldn't read past chapter 24 of this fic. Don't get me wrong, the premise is fine and the plot itself is okay, it's just that the way it's written deeply annoys me. It's pretty apparent from the get-go that the fic uses ChatGPT, and I wouldn't have any issues with that if it weren't for how its abundant use in the fic utterly ruins the feel of the whole story. The AI makes the fic feel very melodramatic, which really makes some parts hard to read, like with Richard and Susan's flirting. Aside from that, the characters seem less like their own person and more like robots wearing their features, and this is due to them not having any distinguishing details in their dialogue that makes them feel like they're the actual characters speaking. For example, what would differentiate a hillbilly character from gentleman character if they're both speaking in a refined manner? You would expect the hillbilly to instead be less sophisticated in his speech because that's in his character, no? The thing about this though, is that I completely understand why they had to use ChatGPT to write this fic. Writing genius characters is very hard when you aren't a genius yourself, after all. And no, that isn't a veiled insult, it's a real thing that most authors who've attempted to write the same type of character have experienced. Still though, despite the rating I gave here, I don't think it's all that bad. It beats reading those trashy intelligible edgy SI-OC fics any day.
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