Item: Untouched by the Outbreak
Rating: 2.2
Author: Daoist_Large_Slong

Daoist_Large_SlongLv156mth

2024-10-28 10:31

Hard to read. I sense chat gpt or some grammar AI. Not enough dialogue that brings any life to the story. I literally skimmed several chapters and only found the MC slightly talking to himself. Story itself may be good but it needs dialogue and edits. Also a ton of repeated information thats annoying to read. Honest thoughts.

Untouched by the Outbreak

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