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2024-07-04 07:43

A little something for the readers. I am new to writing and from what I know how to write it is possible that more than one may not like the story or understand it but understand that I am new to writing. Thank you and please leave comments with an emoji to let me know if you are reading the story.

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If you’re planning to read this novel, let me give you a quick update for those who enjoy analyzing logic or simply reading for fun. One thing I didn’t like about this novel is how the MC changes over time. At the start, he’s portrayed as this cold, cool, and detached character. But as the story progresses, he starts trying to change himself. I get that the author is trying to show character development, but it feels inconsistent. If the MC is supposed to be an assassin, shouldn’t he remain cold and hardened, at least for a while? What’s the point of emphasizing his assassin background if he’s not going to act like one? Another issue is the way the MC tries to save some slaves. This isn’t a bad plot point in itself, but it’s poorly executed. The MC deliberately gets himself kidnapped to infiltrate the group and save them, but it’s full of logical inconsistencies. For instance, the MC has mana, yet none of the kidnappers notice it—except for a girl in the same cell. Let me explain the backstory. The MC takes over the body of someone who has recently died. This body was running away from the kidnappers before its death. Here’s where it gets strange: why aren’t the kidnappers questioning how he’s alive again or how he suddenly has mana? In this world, a person’s mana is detectable through their hands, so it should’ve been obvious. The reason the MC wants to save the slaves is because he sees himself in them, which is fine. But the real reason—revealed by the author—is that a princess is among the captives, though the MC doesn’t know this yet. The whole setup feels like a typical cliché: save the beauty, and she falls for the hero instantly without a second thought. Now, the logic behind the escape plan is where things completely fall apart. The MC plans to run away with the captives, but anyone who understands human nature knows it’s not that simple. Some captives are injured, sleep-deprived, or starving. When people are scared, human nature kicks in, and things can turn ugly. Some will betray others to survive, and others might even resort to violence for their own sake. This lack of realism bothers me because the MC is supposed to be an assassin—someone who has seen the worst of humanity. He should understand human betrayal and the complexities of survival. Instead, the author glosses over these issues, making everything too easy. It feels like the author isn’t considering the bigger picture, which makes the story frustrating to read. "Now if you read this far I did use ChatGPT to fix some of my writing but it changed most of my work but it still the same everything is the same but it has a more complex writing that I don’t put in my writing.”

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