Review Detail of YannNovel88 in Omnipotent Ascension

Hello, there, author. As promised, I'll give you brutally honest review. As I've said in the other day, you need to fix how you write the dialogue but I see no improvement. I mean, why you do you use "<" and ">" to separate the dialogues and paragraphs instead of ("Blas bla, bla.). Your story is good, but ruined by your ignorance to learn the proper writing techniques. good luck.